I am putting up my third story please comment it confuses me when people just rate and disappear even if its just a smiley face or something. 

written listeing to Rammstien, Meatloaf, Bon Jovi, Lita Ford, Tool, SOAD and all manner of cheesy 80's music so my works probably a little wierd in places. Disturbed are my band I listen them whatever mood I'm in and can write pages and pages :-D

mature due to a couple of small swears, please try not to tell me off for my punctuation I'm not good at it

"The worst enemy to creativity is self-doubt." Sylvia Plath

beneath the felted sky today, I found an unknown treasure in our city, a stark and utterly transfixing wetland landscape that has left my heart quickened at the hope it represents, and the possibilities presented...

just to add I do not like Twilight at all;  my problem with 'Twilight'? It's a romance story about a girl's choice between bestiality and necrophilia.

the best poem ever released

Desiderata - Max Ehrmann

Go placidly amid the noise and the haste, 
and remember what peace there may be in silence. 

As far as possible, without surrender, 
be on good terms with all persons. 
Speak your truth quietly and clearly; 
and listen to others, 
even to the dull and the ignorant; 
they too have their story. 
Avoid loud and aggressive persons; 
they are vexatious to the spirit. 

If you compare yourself with others, 
you may become vain or bitter, 
for always there will be greater and lesser persons than yourself. 
Enjoy your achievements as well as your plans. 
Keep interested in your own career, however humble; 
it is a real possession in the changing fortunes of time. 

Exercise caution in your business affairs, 
for the world is full of trickery. 
But let this not blind you to what virtue there is; 
many persons strive for high ideals, 
and everywhere life is full of heroism. 
Be yourself. Especially do not feign affection. 
Neither be cynical about love, 
for in the face of all aridity and disenchantment, 
it is as perennial as the grass. 

Take kindly the counsel of the years, 
gracefully surrendering the things of youth. 
Nurture strength of spirit to shield you in sudden misfortune. 
But do not distress yourself with dark imaginings. 
Many fears are born of fatigue and loneliness. 

Beyond a wholesome discipline, 
be gentle with yourself. 
You are a child of the universe 
no less than the trees and the stars; 
you have a right to be here. 
And whether or not it is clear to you, 
no doubt the universe is unfolding as it should. 

Therefore be at peace with God, 
whatever you conceive Him to be. 
And whatever your labors and aspirations, 
in the noisy confusion of life, 
keep peace in your soul. 

With all its sham, drudgery, and broken dreams, 
it is still a beautiful world. 
Be cheerful. Strive to be happy.

some of the authors on here that I would recommend for their works: 

http://www.protagonize.com/author/MorriganAoife

a wonderful woman with useful critique who has kept me writing even though sometimes I really didn't want to :-D

http://www.protagonize.com/author/Insanity

Insanity for keeping me sane and making sure my humour is valid :-D

http://www.protagonize.com/author/Tombstone

A good friend of mine :-D

i shall be looking up the others as there are many more writers on here who have helped me :-D thanks all